This poem needs something. What is it?

Question: This poem needs something!. What is it!?

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Tonight
by TD Euwaite

Anticipation of complicity…

Will the copper colored zipper
sing its holy chorus
slipping passed the strained elastics
holding back the lustful outburst!.

Then the vision of your gown,
falling down, all around us!.
Tonight will be remembered
as the time when we both savored
passionate persuasion’s

…concurrence!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It's missing Applause!.!.!.It's a beautiful, sensual, and elegant poem!. No need for a third stanza!.!.!.it stands wonderfully on its own!. I like it when a little is left to the imagination!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The End

it's really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

It needs an interesting twist in the ending !. Perhaps some faint humour !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

it needs a lil flairWww@QuestionHome@Com

Did TOS state you can come on here and be so rampant!?

oh! honey that's sooo naughty!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ziiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiip It, Or let It out!. Don`t hold back that lustful
outburst!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Correct me if I'm wrong!.!.!.okay, I'm wrong!~
Seems like this is merely a dream, of sorts!.!.!.not an actuality!.!.!.yet!. Anyway!.!.!.!.

Good Morning!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It works for me, TD, as is !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know !.!.!.!.!.!.It's missing something
Another verse!.!.!.!.stanza whatever before the last one!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.I DID like it tho!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A final stanza, which will unfold the powerful, lustful outburst!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like a plan!. (Change slipping "passed" to "past")!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

To be totally and completely finished, it needs the addition of one small group!. That group is called pictures!. Oh, wait, you already gave us the picture in words!. Forestall the additions of color prints, it's good enough as is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't think it's missing anything!
Too bad my husband is gone to work!.!.!.!.!.*sigh*
Words are very powerful!Www@QuestionHome@Com

something that turns the poem aroundWww@QuestionHome@Com

I need something cold to drink!. The poem is great!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

X-Rated 3rd Stanza!!!!!!!!!!!!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

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(they're allowed here http://www!.nabble!.com/%E2%99%AAWriters-U!.!.!. )

Oh please, oh please, oh please *^_^*

Loved it thus far <3Www@QuestionHome@Com