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Question: Kind of a long answer to TD's neck poem!. How does this swing!.!?
"destiny"
Behind scenes of destiny,
adoring all songs you sing!.
Call me in, with you I'll dwell,
take my heart, cast the spell!.
Daughters of the moon so high,
sing love songs and sirens sigh!.
Your sweet juice, down my lip,
under lashes of your whip!.
Desire pulses through my veins,
slowly I cry out in pain!.
Terror while I gently sleep,
I've no power, power is weak!.
Tell me that I am dreaming,
wake me now, stop the screaming!.
Tears flow down, why the crying,
I am not afraid of dying!.
When you know time's at hand,
then you really understand!.
There has not been an error,
you can't stop, surmounting terror!.
In my cell, bells do chime,
reflecting, not much time!.
Five O'clock, the gallows pole,
sands of time, running low!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Oh DP, so refreshing it is to see you pumping out these works my friend, I truly am a fan <3Www@QuestionHome@Com
I am not afraid of dying!. I feel that the after life Is much better than this one!. My brother went their in 2000 , and I know he`s waiting for me!. So when my sands of time run out I will be ready!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Have you been away in a dark cupboard practising your poetry skills!? - this is another good 'un!. The structure and the subject matter are handled well!.
I like the last verse - (I'd take out 'do')
In my cell bells chime
reflecting - not much time!.
Five o'clock!. The gallow's pole,
Sands of time running low!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh, this is great ! Resignation of the inevitable, and hopefully at peace with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is really fantastic and really great !.Your a great poet and it shows!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Should I be impressed by this rhyme!?
Naw!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
It's what I have come to expect from you!.
Well done again DP!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This one has a different tone than your others and I love it all the same!!! You should collaborate all of your pieces into a book!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
when your poems start out romantic and whimsical I'm all excited!. the ending is always the same!. I'm a lover!. i love the thought of love!. i love to be in love!. i love being love!. and when finally i smile, i become just stuck!. but i do enjoy your poetry!. always a twist!.Www@QuestionHome@Com