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Position:Home>Poetry> Honest criticism of my poem i wrote i down when i was angry i don't know ifQuestion: Honest criticism of my poem i wrote i down when i was angry i don't know if its any good!? i feel like picking them off
one by one, who would care i wish to cut there heads off revenge is too sweet to spare they bullied me so i'll bully them im even considering steroids roid rage when i finally see them and make sure its me the avoid i'll finally let go of my temper then they will know what they did to me i struggle to hold back my temper and this revenge will be a sweet victoryWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: wow the best poems are always fuelled by pure emotion, i love it, your a talented poet, the only thing that i would say is a couple of spelling mistakes, well done, poetry for the soul!!Www@QuestionHome@Com I like the wording :D I would just change some of the phrases so the timeing fits together more!. Well done Very good:)Www@QuestionHome@Com Being an avid poem writer myself I find it is a good way to flow out emotions but some of the best poems don't use proper grammar always back wards writing and half ideas are rampant in some of my favorite poems!. It is a good start and I think you may have something!. Try to just write down exactly how it feels and write with emotion rather than thought don't worry about a rhyme scheme!. Good Start though!. btw if you need to talk to about thing send me an email I'll try to write you back as best I can!. Don't do steroids :) If you need some ideas on handling the problem I would love to help! Good Start and Good LuckWww@QuestionHome@Com it scares me (slightly, but actually!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com i sense columbine all over againWww@QuestionHome@Com I really like it actually!. (I hope I will never get on the wrong side of you, though!) But, it is very good, it is also good to write poetry when you are feeling a certain way, particularly angry, as the words just flow, and you feel better! Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com This is a good one!. And letting your temper out through writing is really a good idea!. I do that too!. Better try to proofread a bit!. But still, it's a good action-packed poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Not too bad at all, the last line's a tiny bit cheesy though and could maybe do with a bit of revising, but that's just my opinion!. Keep writing the poems and yes it is a good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com Get help before you ruin your life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |