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Question: Do you know what lies beneath the waves!?
The ruder of the moving vessel
would tear the waves asunder!.
They moved through her world
and had no chance to escape her!.
Her eyes peered up
from dark blue stone,
an ever watchful sentinel of
the Depths!.
All those men,
unknowing of her silent humming,
the drumming
droning,
blue speaks from its own mouth,
they will soon see her
as the last breath escapes the pain!.
The walls of her weedy bower bed
give way!
And she arises to the surface,
All the shifting tide about her gilded arms
The dragons
Wolves
Ancient heathen souls
“To arms!”
they cry!.
She raises hand
and smites the deck!.
Men race to hold her down…
She sings…
Through the dirge they hearken
to the calling of her voice!.
Though fear grips them…
something in the water
holds their heart…
And then breaks it on the shoreWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is so amazing, the perfect recreation of the siren from the olden songs!. I can see the men rushing to hold her down, not from fear, but perhaps from infatuation turned to love!. The last four lines are absolutely exquisite!. I can't say anymore!.!.!.except that I'm so damn jealous I can't think straight!. Congratulations on your Top Contributor status!. Now you just have to make sure you keep it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have little time to answer so!.!.!. I hope you will prolong this until I can get back to it and give it what it deserves!.!.!. For now I will say, enchanted tale, for those Ensnared by Siren!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Great poem! You have an amazing talent for making words come to life!. Every one of your poems that I have read plays a movie in my head while I am reading!.!.!.I can picture everything you describe!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
So, can I go swimming now or it she still mad!? lol Another gem!. Some great images such an ever watchful sentinel!.!.!., all the shifting tide about her gilded arms, and the walls of her weedy bower bed!.
Spell check on rudder is my only critique for this piece penned so well!. My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Brava, very dramatic, i love it vivid imagry
:)Www@QuestionHome@Com
More magic, more drama, more emotional intensity, more beauty!. In other words, a normal day for you!.
P!.S!. It's "rudder!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
Do you know what lies beneath the waves!?
yes, An Octopus's gardenWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is a beautiful poem!. You have such a way with words!. However, I feel that I have to warn you that dabbling into mythology is dangerous, and is part of the New Age cult!. If you let them take your mind while you are young and so powerful with words, then I fear you can never return from where you will go!. So, I entreat you, find the light and use your wonderful talents for God!.Www@QuestionHome@Com