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SONG ENSNARING SIREN part VI

The seasons changed,
Eva estranged herself
from rage and hatred!.
Under the wings of
her Siren lover
the cover of darkness,
Love hovered and created
a beauty beyond perfection!.
-----
The priestess sighed
and raised an incense prayer
of thanks, the glare of ice
was gone from Eva's eyes,
the silent cries had stilled!.
The blackness had been willed away forgivness's wish fulfilled!.
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"Never leave me,"
Eva said, holding earth
and holding hand,
"I can stand with you,
without you, I would fall!."
The Siren witch,
of water and air,
knew all within the heart
of Eva; loved all that she knew!.
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With gleeful grin
the priest raised his torch!.
"DESTROY THEIR SIN!"
The crowd rallied; sallied forth,
fires burning, fear churning
in their hands!.
Wickedness must be punished,
evildoers must be put down,
beneath the ground,
scattered to ash!.

The priest roved
through the forest,
followed by droves
of paranoia!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I have a feeling that this little touch of happiness is the most we will see!.!.!. but we were never ones for happy!.!.!. It is nice to see a little of this here though, just for a moment!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Epic piece!. Almost a screenplay!.!.!.or stage play!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your imagination, a gift for us to savor!. Kudos again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Just like a play or somethingWww@QuestionHome@Com

The epic continues!. The imagery is again intense and mysterious: "droves of paranoia" is an original!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thank you!. I was waiting for Part 6!. Powerful ending!. Although the ending caused the beginning of paranoia - a life of its own!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

long, but good!! I liked it!.!.!.alote!!!!!!! :)
Very nice poem!!
7 1/2 out of 10!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A beautiful work,
my darling,
what becomes
of the witches love!?
What becomes
of the priest!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

amazing Eva!
this is so good i feel like someone in it watching!

and yes the ever world of life is in constant change,
always something moving!.!.
but the only thing that doesnt ever change is!.!.
the past!
!.never!.
erasing his transgression will fail!!
hahahaha! tyranny tries anything!.

SHING! Try!.!.!.!.This!.!.!.!.Blade!.!.!.

wait Farmer!!! draw down!.!.
as Siren & Eva speak in tandem
in a forest unnaturally reverberating!.!.!.

(just doing my job i say, lol)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I was lulled by the soft beauty of the love story that begins this piece until the nefarious priest shatters the calm!. How extremely dramatic this is, and I love every word!. The end is fraught with anticipation- I can't wait for the next poem!. This would be incredible with illustrations when you publish it!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The best poem series I have ever read!.
encore!
=]]Www@QuestionHome@Com

I want to see these and Sirens all together when they are done!.!.!. would you e-mail me them sometime when they are!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I just finished reading them all!.

A truly profound piece of work unlike anything i have previously read, i can not wait for the next peice ,Www@QuestionHome@Com