To sappy and plain, what do you think?

Question: To sappy and plain, what do you think!?

Out of Time

I awake in fantasy
Perfectly warm
Not childish fancy
But dream with form
Warmth of body
Next to mine
We breathe hotly
And there is no time

Later responsibility
Tears down my resolve
I return to our sanctuary
With no problems to solve
It's only in memory
Only in mind
But strength and beauty
I always can find!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Not plain, and definitely not sappy!. I would call it sweet, tender, a side that most do not often see, either from male or female!. I truly enjoyed it, the rhythm, the rhyming, the subtlely, like a hand trailing gracefully over another body, feeling intimate, love!. This was beautiful!. Thanks, Alobar!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like a Monday morning, where I have to go back to work after a wet dream!. I know the feeling!. the only error here is!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.waking up, I hate that!. I did like your write!. I know the feeling!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I thought it was great!!!

perfect 10!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

i can see you put a lot of thought into that and it didnt go on for to longWww@QuestionHome@Com

Neither sappy or plain!. A slice of life, if we are lucky!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A comparison of memories of responsibility and desire and of the way life's problems take away time from our most precious moments!. Poetry, to be beautiful, does not need to be complicated!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I answered this - but I think I forgot to actually post it!.

What I said was How about changing Strength and Beauty to strength in beauty, to signify that your partner's beauty sustains you through the day!.
Then I wrote some other personal stuff, which was pretty boring, so I won't bother to retype it!.
Nice sensual feeling conveyed by first verse, and enough ambiguity in the second to hold our attention!.
Thank you for a perfect little poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's about that post coital cigarette i presume!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Friend you need to set the alarm earlier to make time for togetherness! lol

Not sappy in the slightest! Reflective and thoughtful!. A lovely voice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com