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Question: New Poem! (when i am with you)!?
“When I am with you”
Brittany Evanko

When I am with you I feel a warm embrace
Taking my hand, I brush it across your face!.
I know we are just friends, but I help but to feel
When I am with you, I have never felt so real!.

I will never forget the very first time I saw you
At that moment, I knew the words you said were true!.
Spending time with you is like having angels nearby!.
I never want you to leave, dreading our next goodbye!.

When I am with you, I can’t do anything but smile
So I ask you, please don’t leave, but stay a while!.
My heart has been torn so many times before!.
When I am with you, I have feelings that I can’t explain

I wish I could tell you how I feel,
But it is too far dangerous to reveal!.
I don’t want to see you go
This will just be something you will never know!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Kind of cliche, but well-written!. I can feel your emotion!. Just try to use words/phrases that are more creative and haven't been used so much before!. And work on your rhyming!. But overall, very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com