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Question: Poem I wrote it for a friend!? What do you think!.(:!?
This beautiful flower,
It's still blooming!.
Into something magnificant,
And happiness I'm assunming!.

The bees are still buzzing,
The season's no where near the end!.
Actually it's at the beginning,
Just starting to mend!.

If you've found a broken petal,
Shame on that bee!
But another petal will grow,
For a bee to find and both will be full of glee!.(:

You have truly amzing grass,
All around you!.
To protect and remain,
And stay true!.

If it happens to rain,
Make sure your beauty still shines!.
It wont rain for ever,
Just for this short time!.

The sun is comming out,
Your petals are gleaming!.
The out come of your transformation,
Is something you should be beaming!.

haha i put it in the truth box thing on myspace!. and made it in less than 2 minutes!. Im 14 i know it seems elementary but what do you think!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it's pretty good!.
I would personally take out the 3rd stanza!.
Nice work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i love it!. it empowers your Friend saying that she is a beautiful flower how nice do you love her or do you like herWww@QuestionHome@Com

Thats well good! And if your friend is a good friend she wont care if it sounds elementry!Www@QuestionHome@Com