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Question: Musing!.!.!.My first Quatern!.!.!.does it work!?
Musing (A Quatern)
Up to the sky, I cast my eyes
When melencholy thoughts appear
Where vibrant colors bounce around
The fluffy clouds that make me smile
No longer will I sit and sulk
When melencholy thoughts appear
Instead, I'll take another look
For joyful laughter in the air
A place my muse is oft' concealed
Contented hue of eyes bright blue
Where vibrant colors bounce around
She paints a face without dispair
Then, adds a touch of warm sunshine
That melts the coldest atmosphere
And dries the tears from all around
The fluffy clouds that make me smileWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is magnificent! I'm staggered and humbled!. Such a fun form on a beautiful subject!. Rhythm, as ever, right on, and once again the fun distinction of no end rhyme!. But, to tell you the truth, as rhyming is not my forte, I would love to see one with end rhyme, or any sort of rhyme, merely to see what the effect would be!. Whatever the case, thank you for this beautiful poem and may your pen never be silent or still!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You know how much I love this type of structured poetry!. I have never written one of these!. You did a magnificent job!. Meter, rhyme, form and imagery are superb!.
See this link:
http://members!.optushome!.com!.au/kazoom/p!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ah, that cheers me up! I loved your word choice and the images evoked ("fluffy clouds"!.!.!.always)!. Lines 2 and 3 were really colorfully displayed and took on additional meaning through the repitition!.
Excellent!. I think you're an exceptional poet!. Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
So how about calling this a 4x4 with 8wheels and echoes!? No!? Quatern sounds like a lantern that needs a quarter to use!. No wonder young people like rap!.
Oh, your quatern was superb!. I would give you a quarter but I am still trying to light the quatern myself!. Muse where are you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I am so impressed by this quatern, your first!. It flows beautifully and the structure is flawless!. I especially love the third stanza, but the whole poem is lovely!. It makes me yearn for my muse; perhaps I should look up to find her!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's very beautiful!
I love it!. Speaks of hope and joy!.!.!.!.!.
Thanks for the link by the way! I don't know anything about structuring or form or any of that stuff so I'm going to do a little studying when I get through with the yard work!
Happy day!Www@QuestionHome@Com
call me a dummy!. The explanation and the example do not match, although the example and yours does!.
The description:
A quatern has four stanzas, each of which has four lines!. Each line contains eight syllables!. It does not have to rhyme, but it does follow a specific pattern of line repetition: the first stanza's first line is repeated as the second stanza's second line, the third stanza's third, and the final stanza's fourth!. This form originated in France!.
According to that, 'Up to the sky, I cast my eyes'
should have been repeated as stanza 2 line 2, stanza 3 line 3, and stanza 4 line 4!. The example given matches the form you have done, but neither matches what it says!?
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I never heard of it, so I went to see what it wass, and I am still confusseled!.
edit:
research is in order, I hate not knowing something!.Www@QuestionHome@Com