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Question: Is this really a poem!? Read please!? Rate!? (Serious answers only!.)!?
You hear a child
Crying in the distance,
You know it is yours
The one that was never born!.
You tune it out, though
Because of your pride
You hear a woman being
Beaten in the distance
She screams for help
But soon her cries are
silenced by heavy blows!.
You say nothing to anyone
Because you know that woman is you!.
You hear someone crashing a car
In the distance!.
You tune it out
You don't run to help!.
You sit there and cry,
Because you, and only you know,
These things are part of your life
And you know they will come to pass!.
Someone told me to write free verse and this is my best stab at it off the top of my head!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
People tell you ALL the time to try free-verse and you know why it is!? It's because people that write with rhymes only don't have much substance behind their words, or they don't get their point across!.!.!.
Free-verse is was real poets use, and it's harder then regular poetry!.!.!. It takes A LOT of practice!.!.!. this is okay for a first timer!. Just keep practicing!
Here is some editing!.!.!.!.
You hear a child
Crying in the distance,
You know it is yours
You tune it out, though
Because of your pride
You hear a woman being
Beaten in the distance
She screams for help
But soon her cries are
silenced by heavy blows!.
You say nothing to anyone
Because you know
that woman is you!.
You hear a sound
the crashing of a car
In the distance!.
You tune it out
You don't run to help!.
You sit there
and inside you cry
Because you, and only you know,
These things are part of your life
And you know that
they will come to pass!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, this is a poem!. However, it is not "free verse"!.
There is a distinct rythmn!. The most common rhythm in your poem is "tetrameter"!. or four beats!. For example:
You hear a child
Crying in the distance
ta-Dah ta-Dah
Dah-ta-ta ta-Dah-ta
Shakespeare's sonnets were commonly known as "Iambic pentameter"!. (ta-Dah, ta-Dah, ta-Dah, ta-Dah, ta-Dah), That was five counts of two syllable sets, with the accent on the second syllable!.
To accomplish "Free Verse" a poet must be able to completely dismiss rules of rhythm!.
This is a nice poem!. It has a solemn and resolving tone, and a strong message!. However, it is not "Free Verse"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com