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Being stuck in hell!. I think I'd be better of, Raised in a jail!. I want to be a little jail bird, And break free!. Find an ounce of happiness, To make me feel complete!. I want to fly, On my own!. I know I can do it, I'm already alone!. You'll see a smile, Along with love is all you'll see!. So why is okay, If you only take advantage of me!? Cant you see, Happiness is what I deserve!. But when I find the road, I seem to always take the wrong turn!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: sounds like a jail bird longing for redemption! funny this is: "So why is okay," better,'better off' sure, 'Happiness is what I deserve' go for it, have hope even though 'I seem to always take the wrong turn!.' nice short optimistic poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com hmm!.!.!.it's very cliche!. there is a poem already like this!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |