Critique My Poem: Lonely Heart at Night?

Question: Critique My Poem: Lonely Heart at Night!?

The silence is filling the room
All what I hear is my heart beat
No sigh, no murmur or cry
The time passes slowly
I lay down in bed lonely
It feels it will last for ever
Dreams float around me like ghosts
The night seems long and enduring
All what I am looking for is a ray of light
For a day break and sunshineWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Ooo, I really like this one! Its really expressive!. It has a stealth rhythm to it!. Its not really detectable, but its there!. Really love this one!. Really nice! I also read some of your other ones on poetry!.com!. (You have quite a collection) I actually never came across anybody else that enjoyed the "language arts" like me!. Thats really cool!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com