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Question: What do you think of my haiku, honest, constructive criticism appreciated!.!?
Purrs

Blooms of thrumming warmth
spark bright bubbles in the ether
like laughter born of love

NB Please no definitions of haiku structureWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I won't talk about the structure as you've requested but if you do alter to a 5-7-5 you get a stronger haiku!.

Blooms of thrumming warmth
bright bubbles in the ether
laughter born of love

With those very minor tweaks!.!.!.I like it!. It makes an interesting association!.Www@QuestionHome@Com