Purrs
Blooms of thrumming warmth
spark bright bubbles in the ether
like laughter born of love
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Blooms of thrumming warmth spark bright bubbles in the ether like laughter born of love NB Please no definitions of haiku structureWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I won't talk about the structure as you've requested but if you do alter to a 5-7-5 you get a stronger haiku!. Blooms of thrumming warmth bright bubbles in the ether laughter born of love With those very minor tweaks!.!.!.I like it!. It makes an interesting association!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |