criticize?!?! Much appreciated??

Question: Please read my poem and comment/criticize!?!!?! Much appreciated!?!?

Advice and comments much appreciated thanks

It’ isn’t easy
Seeing your betrayal
Watching it drip
From every pore, to every nail

You smile so politely,
But I can’t see your face
The sickening dark figure
Has now taken its place

Contagious to the weak
You relish in success
For they too are now stained
With the murky substance you possess

You allow it to flow freely
With every word you speak
Malicious whispers that surround my mind,
Escaping from your Clique

Finally cloaked in darkness
From the hatred you have spread
You don’t ask for forgiveness
For the lies you have said

Flawless at a glance
You remain a callous fake
Still tainted with the betrayal
That you can not escape

(Oh yes and just in case you read this and you’re not from the UK and this it does not rhyme, clique is pronounced like beak here) :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Wonderful - captures brilliantly what many people must have felt!. Makes the heart bleed to read of the pain the writer must have suffered!. I hope you write more poems to share!.
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Well Done! Nice and smooth!.

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very good well done

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Nice job! :D
It takes me back to my english lesson days where we would try and guess what on earth the poet was on about!

To be fair, I understoood most of it, just lost you a bit on the 'flow freely' bit!. Whats flowing!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

i liked it!. well doneWww@QuestionHome@Com

Seems pretty good to me!.!.!.but it's very dark!.!.!.couldn't your poetry speak of brighter topics than betrayal and mistrust!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have written an interesting and darkly dramatic poem!. The clarity comes in the last stanza, which is a very descriptive and excellent ending!. It flows very well!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice poem!.!.!. it's nice to see something with some atmosphere!.!.!. I've been reading Shakespeare all day for school, and some of his poems are so dead boring!Www@QuestionHome@Com

yes conveys a deep sense of someones dissatisfaction!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

I really like this, it's good!. The best part for me is: "You allow it to flow freely with every word you speak!. Malicious whispers that surround my mind, escaping from your clique!." The image of betrayal flowing freely and actually escaping like something tangible works really well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

EXCELLENT!.!.!.!.!.!.!.*applause*Www@QuestionHome@Com

I do like it, it's a very nice and meaningful job!. So simple, yet so powerful!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com