Do you like my love poetry? Pardon my grammar if you're an english teacher o

Question: Do you like my love poetry!? Pardon my grammar if you're an english teacher or something!?

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Hi! I am an English teacher, and you are right to be sheepish about your grammar! Don't worry about that part, though!. You write some very nice messages, and a few of your images are strong!. Just based on the feedback of others, though, the general consensus seems to be that they could be better!. I am in agreement!. I would suggest you take some of these poems and work on updating them a little!. Fix the grammar mistakes, but not all the deliberate ones!. That makes your voice!. also, look for weak spots in the poem (where it felt like you were shoving words in to serve a purpose) and revamp them!. Don't forget that free verse poetry still follows some type of order and rhythm- the poet creates it but it must be accessible to the reader!. Don't give up on your writings!. It takes time and willingness to revise to create poetry of worth!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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no, it sounds more like you're trying to make a rap song!.!. sorry!Www@QuestionHome@Com

you lost ur rhythym at the end!.
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i dont remeber but it is good, and hey it could even be a rap song!.! haha!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Xanga told me that there was no such page!.

But considering what the answers have said- I suppose your poetry is dumb!

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you were actually needed to provide the link here!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thayr Good,But You Sat Too Much "girl" "My Girl" And such!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It'd make a good RnB or rap or somhing, not so much a poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

sorry , but i do believe from my comment and the other's comments , you should STOP writing poetry , simply as u cant and u r not a poetWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's good but have you thought about making raps!? They sound more like raps!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry hun, I can't get to it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com