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Question: Ok, I have made more understandable!. What do you think!?
There are devils in these riddles,
drone needles weaving occasions in the stiches of dissonance,
echoed of gamate sniping thrills of vagrance,
the fluctuation electric!.
Energy, a thousand-fold volt, intricate, fuses,
failing, and so curves a mesa out of spiral chiralities,
atomic ghost charges in the creases of tapestry,
a trip shunt circuit,
evocative of a symphonic score,
beating the cuckold!.

I, a sheet, a fabric,
a trip shunt circuit,
fading far so as roses do!.

Ships tatter sails in these gales,
waves flow full and arise the ferocious shallow reefs,
grounds shore and slit a ship’s bow,
the ghost sinks to the depth of sediment,
a wreak deep!.
High are the hours unfurling as the surf ages free, recovery,
and fortune saves the vision for a fish!.

This life, cracked,
a hollow retreat dearer then the drowning,
further then fracture, fading far so as roses do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
extremelly good word use and details, i like that you have a large vocab!.

something urks me about the flow though, poems dont have to rhyme, but they do have to have a certain flow to them so they can be read comfortably!.
keep it up though, youll get it =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Poetry is supposed to communicate a message!. You've got the images down but now make them concrete!. First find out what you want to say and then say it through your good images!. All I got from that poem was a whole lot of boring pictures!.Www@QuestionHome@Com