tearing at the strings
of a lovers heart
a careless attempt to bring you closer
that's pulling you apartWww@QuestionHome@Com
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of a lovers heart a careless attempt to bring you closer that's pulling you apartWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I'd say a 4!. I like your idea and your style of words, but I think it would sound much better if you tried to go a bit farther with it!. also, the rhyming seems a bit forced!. If you added a distinct meter, it would seem more finished and powerful!. But with poetry, you really have to go with your own style!. Find your voice, and your words will begin to sound more sure of themselves! Good start! I hope you keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh My God that really sucked!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i like it 9!.6Www@QuestionHome@Com i rate it 3Www@QuestionHome@Com 2!. It lacks structure, emotion, and creativity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com it's ok about a 5!.!.!.!.i like it but add more!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com 2Www@QuestionHome@Com 7!. It's really good!!! Very short, but a short poem can be amazing!. Good Job, If people say It suck,then Well!.!.!. I have my opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm not a big fan of the ABCB rhyme scheme, but it was overall good!. So 9!.5 and starred!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com i liked it except for the last line!. It's much cooler if it doesn't rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com -8Www@QuestionHome@Com 9!.99999999999999999999999999999999999999!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Meager attempt by an imbecile!.Www@QuestionHome@Com its not really a poem!. but if that were a part of the poem, then i would give it a nine!. but if thats it, i would give it a 5!. so add more :]Www@QuestionHome@Com well, i guess it's ok, so like a 5!. but you don't capture us as the readers!. you need a little more flow, because these are all short, choppy phrases!. how about a little longer, with some background information, like a description!. you also need more emotion!. i do like the tearing at the strings/of a lovers heart part though!. i think that if you kept it up and extended it a little more, it would be great!. ps poems don't always have to rhyme!Www@QuestionHome@Com |