A little experimental poem, what do you think?

Question: A little experimental poem, what do you think!?

Here I stand,
big limbs above
of a huge old oak tree!.
Below the river fan
as fingers of a hand!.
The hills about me I love,
I ran,
like a small animal, free!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The word that does not work is "of!."

"!.!.!.above of!.!.!." not good!.

Just take it out!. "!.!.!.above a huge oak!.!.!."

TDWww@QuestionHome@Com

A child free to be free before the restraints of adulthood enter!? A daydream of youth past!? Are you experimenting with daydreams!? For I see nothing but a nice reflective look here and it is well said!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it; especailly the last three lines!. idk why but its good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great Poem! Very Profound!. Work on more like these!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Change "fan" to "fans!." There will still be internal rhyme and the grammar will be correct!. Good imagery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think the experiment is a success!. I love how you describe the tree limbs as fingers of a hand!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I feel the freedom, fun, and glee in this poem!. I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Would like to see more of your experiments!
I visualized the scene!Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice work keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com