Sorry I forgot this severe paring of a previous poem. Is this better.?

Question: Sorry I forgot this severe paring of a previous poem!. Is this better!.!?

"misery"

The pain,
of a freshly dug grave!.
The mist,
of a gray winter's day!.

Leaves the color of rust,
Sun that never appears!.
Am I the one,
you've been looking for!?

Am I the fear
you cannot feel!?
I'm waiting for you,
but am i for real!?

Tears are like rivers,
her sorow the sea!.
I am now drowning,
in misery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I like it as is!.!.!.it stands on its own!.!.
very good my friend!.!.!.
Remember i am here, If you ever need me to throw you a line to keep you from drowning!
keep up the excellent work!.
-g-loWww@QuestionHome@Com

Just a suggestion :

The pain,
of a freshly dug grave!.
The mist,
of a gray winter's day!.

Leaves the color of rust,
Sun that never appears!.
Am I the lust ,
you've been looking for!?

Am I the fear
you cannot feel!?
I am the reflection,
but am I real!?

Tonight blue river will sing,
My tears , welcomed relief!.
In this I am drowning,
Misery , wretched belief!.Www@QuestionHome@Com