A poem for Thursday Do you like it.?

Question: A poem for Thursday Do you like it!.!?

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I am not afraid!.
As the evening starts
to make it's way!.
I breathe as hard as you,
as I end my day,
I sigh and shelter!.
Try to sink so deep,
just as deep as you!.
Never ever sleep,
I am all alone!.
That is all I need,
so i leave it be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Precious makes a good point!. Try putting the first line last!. It might work better that way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awwwwh someone has some talent here :]]]
I likey!!<3333Www@QuestionHome@Com

A nice poem that speaks of being at peace!. I do like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's nice, makes thursday sound depressin though :/ The first line doesn't work with the rest of the poem either!. Total clash!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. Why not bring it to the next level!? Make a visual poem out of it!. Grab a camera and record some stuff and upload it to PoetryVisualized!.com!. You can also just record audio and attach a picture or graphics to it!. All up to you!. Be creative!. Once uploaded you can share it with your friends and family and also the online community will rate and give you the feedback you are seeking!. You can also ask follow poets for advise etc!. Just visit PoetryVisualized!.com and you will see what potential this new site has to offer you!. My best, TanselWww@QuestionHome@Com

short and "sweet"!.!.!.simple!.

"never, ever sleep"!.!.!.gods i'm so tired!.

this is good for a little poem!. keep writing!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com