Roars through the calm of the full moon nights
In a drunken pursuit of a taintless light
The tides pull skyward in a merciless might
Tossing and turning a boat small and lightWww@QuestionHome@Com
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In a drunken pursuit of a taintless light The tides pull skyward in a merciless might Tossing and turning a boat small and lightWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I think this one is much better then your first! I would not change anything about it!! It's perfect to me! keep up the great work!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com Only one suggestion: Tossing and turning a boat small and light to Tossing and turning a boat both small and light Otherwise, very well said!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like this better than your first one!. I wouldn't change the last line to both!. Nice:)Www@QuestionHome@Com Eh, change one of the lights!. Either on the second line or the last!.!.!.you could go to rhymezone!.com, and look there!. (You type in a word, it finds some that rhyme with it!.) Too many lights kinda ruins it!. But I can picture what you are saying perfectly!. <3Www@QuestionHome@Com Night's a lie who's everyone's thief Seeing stars An outer space Grass Are these lights a dream In a green guitar A stealing stilling strum!?Www@QuestionHome@Com |