Comments on this poem (I'm not happy with the title)?

Question: Comments on this poem (I'm not happy with the title)!?

A Walk in the Forest

When I look at you now
After all these years
I can still see hints and echoes
Of the little girl I never knew,
Of the child
Before your innocence was stripped away
As time does
And you became that woman I met
Fell in love with
And am still enraptured and surprised by
As we walk the final few miles
Of this magical forest trail
That ends with unimaginable visions of
Falling leaves and setting suns,
Treasured memories to be lost
In darkness

I will hold you as the chill descends
And tell you about the forest’s majesty
In dim light
With fading breath;
That you listen
Is as close to rapture that I will ever come!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This was so thought provoking and powerful!. To me, the forest was a metaphor for the years you've spent together, and the ending a reminiscing of those times, as maybe you've grown old together!. "The final few miles" tells me this!. If so, this worked extremely well!. This was so well written, it reads like an elegy almost!. I loved this line "I can still see hints and echoes
Of the little girl I never knew"!. There are so many layers to this poem, and hints to time!. The last stanza sums it all up perfectly, and the last two lines, I just love the brevity in them!. As for the title, I agree with one of the other posters!. It doesn't measure up to the poem!. Maybe something to do with a Harvesting, A Walk Through the Seasons, Or Through Time, etc!. I really enjoyed reading this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I Like it!. Very profound and touching!. You're quite the poet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What about

Autumn of our lives!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Title Suggestion: A Walking Thought!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

I rarely give my stuff titles, but if I were to give it one, that's what I'd use!. This was a nice look at the love of your life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think its amazing!!!
I also think the poems too good for the name i agree with thinking the names abit boring though tis hard to think of one!.!.!.

With fadin breath,
Rapture,
As the chill decends,
Atonment,
Innocence!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's a lovely poem!.
Nice work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful memories!?
stuff doesnt always have to be titled, but coming up with one is a good idea, i guess!. But if you arent happy with the title then dont use that one!.
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Together We Walk!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Enraptured You!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wrap around enrapture!?

Good offering, what a lucky woman!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow that was romantic who ever u r writting about she is very lucky!. i like the title " before winters freeze" its almost perfect for it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Some of us are very lucky!. When I awaken before my husband and see him lying still - for a moment I am frightened and I call his name (softly) And all is right with the world when he answers me!.
Then, me being me, I nag him and speak crossly to him!
Yes your poem is beautiful!. 'When the last evening falls'Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think I prefer the feel of A Walk in the Forest to Before the Winter's Freeze!.!.!.but I still think that the title is a bit unsatisfactory!.!.!.!.I really love this poem!.!.its very gentle and sounds like quiet chimes tinkering!.!.its subtle and soft and privately nostalgic!. I don't think anyone here can suggest a good title for you!.!.!.I don't think anyone can satisfactorily name a poem for someone else!.!.!.its has to have the very personal touch of the writer himself!.Www@QuestionHome@Com