Will you please comment on my new poem?

Question:ILL Literacy

Yesterday, I wrote a poem
and this morning I was slambed,
it was all about illiteracy,
and I thought, "I'll be dambed,"
I wish the curse of Rev. Wright
be not on my great land
but on the heads of Yahoo trolls
who have a heavy hand.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: ILL Literacy

Yesterday, I wrote a poem
and this morning I was slambed,
it was all about illiteracy,
and I thought, "I'll be dambed,"
I wish the curse of Rev. Wright
be not on my great land
but on the heads of Yahoo trolls
who have a heavy hand.

I got all of your poems very clearly .You should not have been
deleted for that.

Good poem =)

really good Elaine....and the title is just wonderful...

Not bad, i wouldn't have thought of such an idea in a poem. Two thumbs up !

With the title, "ILL Literacy," I must ask if the misspelled words are deliberate.

It seems to me that with your quirky way with words you have created a great poem showing illiteracy. It takes masterful control to show not just tell.

Keep writing.
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Yesterday, I wrote a poem
and this morning I was slambed, <-- slammed
it was all about illiteracy,
and I thought, "I'll be dambed," <-- damned
I wish the curse of Rev. Wright
be not on my great land
but on the heads of Yahoo trolls
who have a heavy hand.

Very clever! I absolutely loved it.

I like your poems fun use of words.
I'll star you

You're a clever girl !!! I like your spelling of words. A little poem that makes a necessary point.

Heavy handed
They have banded.
Got me too!
True!

Trolls (censored expletive) are Literary Litterbugs. (Plus a few other things I am not at liberty to mention! Oh, look! I spot one now...just there!)

I am glad you have posted another one. Your voice should never be silenced. It is very good!

Nice poem & all
To ALL the Trolls
Who are not Tall
Whose hands may be heavy
That cannot hold
The story that is told

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great poem. i loved it and hate trolls as well. they're a curse on YA.

hehe
both this and Biscuits' follow-on amused me greatly...especially when the answers say "you can't spell so you can't talk.."
=]

Wow...what a bunch of bullsh!t