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Question:These are two really short poems I made up on the spot so don't think I'm trying to be the next Maya Angelou.

Clouds

The clouds hover overhead
Bringing the dangerous promise of rain,
Unbeknownst to the child below
A torrential storm is brewing.
They form a battle plan
Berating all the people of the Earth
For what it they have done to Mother Nature.

Saying Goodbye

“I will always be with you”,
That is what you said,
Without a tear in your eye,
While dying on your bed.

I was always afraid you would leave me
Without any sort of goodbye
But now that you are gone
I am brave enough to cry.

Everybody says the understand
What I’m going through right now,
And maybe they actually do,
But I can’t really see how.

I didn’t think I could do this,
But now I am ready to let you go
This whole thing made me realize
I love you more than you’ll ever know.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: These are two really short poems I made up on the spot so don't think I'm trying to be the next Maya Angelou.

Clouds

The clouds hover overhead
Bringing the dangerous promise of rain,
Unbeknownst to the child below
A torrential storm is brewing.
They form a battle plan
Berating all the people of the Earth
For what it they have done to Mother Nature.

Saying Goodbye

“I will always be with you”,
That is what you said,
Without a tear in your eye,
While dying on your bed.

I was always afraid you would leave me
Without any sort of goodbye
But now that you are gone
I am brave enough to cry.

Everybody says the understand
What I’m going through right now,
And maybe they actually do,
But I can’t really see how.

I didn’t think I could do this,
But now I am ready to let you go
This whole thing made me realize
I love you more than you’ll ever know.

i love both of the poems..the second one made me feel like crying and it reminds me of my dad too..:(

i like the clouds one (= it rox and is awesomeyy and true

totally cute xxx

very nice--i especially like the "saying goodbye" : )

Being totally honest, the grammar needs work in both poems but with a few improvements they could be really good. The emotion in them was awesome.

I like both of them
Clouds:
The first poem talks about the weather
what is about to happen
Clouds don't necessarily mean it
will rain.
Unless the skies are grey and a storm is coming

Saying Goodbye:
Saying goodbye is never easy
when in difficult times especially
This would mean letting someone go
whether one want to or no

Its hard to say good bye
but the tears will make someone cry
It can be later or now
the method doesnt matter how

i love the saying goodbye one! its beautiful!

i like the saying goodbye one

10 out of 10