Poem?....?

Question:another ametuer poem not very good... umm im 13... rate 1-10 written in a few minutes....

Why is love,
All life is about?
I thought I was above
But I’m starting to doubt,
Whether all my dreams
Are just aimless stares
Like I want something
That just isn’t there.
I thought I was special,
You were something new,
But now I can see
I was just being used.
I can’t see why I love you,
I don’t know why
I thought I was above you
Your love is a lie.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: another ametuer poem not very good... umm im 13... rate 1-10 written in a few minutes....

Why is love,
All life is about?
I thought I was above
But I’m starting to doubt,
Whether all my dreams
Are just aimless stares
Like I want something
That just isn’t there.
I thought I was special,
You were something new,
But now I can see
I was just being used.
I can’t see why I love you,
I don’t know why
I thought I was above you
Your love is a lie.

this is actually an okay poem written by a 13 year old..i write a lot of poetry and i've gotten published once before..i would give this a 6ish..sorry it just has to be more meaningful i mean its very good but you should spend more time on your poem and it make it even better

10..pretty good! Keep it up! =)

that was good. im very into poetry, usually dark poetry not love but that was good. umm.... maybe a 7. just spend more time on your poems it could have more imagery

i really liked it. it has a good subject. I think the end needs a little work though. i would give it a 7 but with a little editing and revising it would be an 8-9.....good luck and keep it up!

Take out the two lines above the last one ( i dont know why and i thought i was above you) oh and the 2 lines after the secod line ( i thought i was above but now im starting to doubt) besides that its great. So the poem would read

Why is love
All life is about?
Whether all my dreams
Are just aimless stares
Like i want something
That just isnt there
I thought i was special
You were something new
But now i see
I was just being used
I cant see why i loved you
Your love is a lie

I know you had some rhyming between the lines i took out but poems dont have to rhyme....... i dont know i dont like the whole i thought i was above you thing. Besides that your on your way. Spice up your vocab a bit and put more heart into it ( pour your guts all over your poems, open up and just write),. I would give it a 7.