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Question:No Lives

I am afride,
that she will not like me,
on a "ride".

I have a smile,
she would be happier.
I am wearing a mask.

Heart so white,
no light that shine upon.
.It.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: No Lives

I am afride,
that she will not like me,
on a "ride".

I have a smile,
she would be happier.
I am wearing a mask.

Heart so white,
no light that shine upon.
.It.

The first stanza could be different...otherwise I think it's pretty cool, especially the last part. :)
How about this for the first stanza:
What I won't know
won't hurt me.
Still I wonder
if she will like me.

Just a suggestion, but I hope you like it. Peace out, cub scout.

Well, is it yours? It needs a little grammatical help. Like I'm really the one to say something about that, but I see it afterwards. It needs to have a little more something to it to make some sense sorry about that. It's not bad though.