Creative writing poem.. what you think?

Question:how many months have passed?
it seems they are so early.
the ground is still covered
and the air is still.
but loudly they proclaim their return.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: how many months have passed?
it seems they are so early.
the ground is still covered
and the air is still.
but loudly they proclaim their return.

There seems to be a lot of blanks to fill in to "get" this poem, and those blanks, like "the spaces between the notes" Mozart says is where music resides, is what makes this work. You have done well.

Awhh, I like it.

not bad.

birds, yes?

I like it. simple - yet elegant.

some of the word choice could use work, but overall decent. :) keep writing!

try to make it longer. maybe you could create another paragraph. it is hanging. dont be offend but thats my critic. peace!

I agree with the last answer; I like your voice, I'd like to hear more.