Another poem- what are your thoughts on it?

Question:I have written yet another poem, and I am curious as to your thoughts on it. I'm not asking what I could do to make it better- this is my poetry, and I won't change it. What I'm asking is what you get out of what's already there- what do you see in your mind's eye when you read it? What comes to mind? Does it remind you of anything? What feeling does it create? Add in other points as you may. I am eager for feedback.
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To catch the smallest wave is folly
lest it be followed by the next
and builds up with a rogue wave-
to put the strongest to the test.
How can you contain the sea,
hold the tsunami's rage?
You cannot keep such fury
in a little iron cage
lest the boiling sea melt the iron,
the tempest break the bars-
explode within you- and all that's left
is your tattered, shivering, broken heart.

Oh, but how easier, calmer the sea-
if the rain would cease its quarrel with me!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I have written yet another poem, and I am curious as to your thoughts on it. I'm not asking what I could do to make it better- this is my poetry, and I won't change it. What I'm asking is what you get out of what's already there- what do you see in your mind's eye when you read it? What comes to mind? Does it remind you of anything? What feeling does it create? Add in other points as you may. I am eager for feedback.
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To catch the smallest wave is folly
lest it be followed by the next
and builds up with a rogue wave-
to put the strongest to the test.
How can you contain the sea,
hold the tsunami's rage?
You cannot keep such fury
in a little iron cage
lest the boiling sea melt the iron,
the tempest break the bars-
explode within you- and all that's left
is your tattered, shivering, broken heart.

Oh, but how easier, calmer the sea-
if the rain would cease its quarrel with me!

You could liken it to the stampbook personality; one that when the book is full, watch out. The rain is interesting in that it signifies annoyance, doom and gloom, discomfort and coldness. The iron cage, as the post before, could be the ribcage, or person or even the rules of society, of polite manners and deference, etc. You take a twist with the reference to the tattered, broken heart as if as strong as you are, the explosion, while perhaps relieving the build up leaves you broken. Overall, an excellent effort and one that makes me think. Well done.

Is "lest" the right word, it seems mistaken?

"Really liked the line "How can you contain the sea, hold the tsunami's rage?"

The mixing of metaphors after that--boiling sea melt then tempest breaking, then tattered--shivering didn't work for me but I really liked the line about containing the sea and the waves.

may the sunshine dry your tears
and let the ocean pull you back to be
i like to see the water
the water of the sea
your poem was pretty good
but now i have to pee
see ya

The sea is the sea of emotions within your "tattered heart" and the rain is the sad circumstances that cause you so much pain that you must try to hold back the Tsunami's rage. The little iron cage reminded me of a frail ribcage holding the heart, a body too frail to contain the boiling emotions that the heart feels. I love these images. The poem is really lovely. Thank you.

i really like this one.....i understand how you feel when people try to change things in ones poetry...poetry, its what you feel...lol like "verb, it's what you do" lol sorry...got sidetracked....but i really do understand how you feel. my friend always tries to change them but i hate it...i just dont show it to her anymore.....
~Deadly Poetry