Giving up?

Question:Your heart pounding so fast.
Your breathing is getting harder now.
Time is running low now and nothing to do about it.
You take that last step hoping it will count for something.

You take that last step hoping it will count for something.
You are laying there when no knowledge of whats going on.
The bright green eyes closed.
The door to your soul is closed.

The door to your soul it closed.
How will we no what you where going to do now.
Your last step was it for nothing?

Your last step was it for nothing?
You are giving up just that easy.
Did you give up on life?

As the voices in your mind say these things,
you are awaken to take on life with a more,
powerful mood and strength.

Powerful mood and strength.
You take another step to full fill your dream.
The dream of all dreams.

The dream of all dreams.
Making a good example of not giving up.
To be able to take life by the horns and tackle it down.
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What do you think about it?
Please say what ever.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Your heart pounding so fast.
Your breathing is getting harder now.
Time is running low now and nothing to do about it.
You take that last step hoping it will count for something.

You take that last step hoping it will count for something.
You are laying there when no knowledge of whats going on.
The bright green eyes closed.
The door to your soul is closed.

The door to your soul it closed.
How will we no what you where going to do now.
Your last step was it for nothing?

Your last step was it for nothing?
You are giving up just that easy.
Did you give up on life?

As the voices in your mind say these things,
you are awaken to take on life with a more,
powerful mood and strength.

Powerful mood and strength.
You take another step to full fill your dream.
The dream of all dreams.

The dream of all dreams.
Making a good example of not giving up.
To be able to take life by the horns and tackle it down.
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What do you think about it?
Please say what ever.

thanks for encouraging me...

.....you are a light, keep shining...you have a gift, nourish it...

is it about hope and overcoming difficulties?

I think its really cool.

I love how you used the last sentance of every verse to end that verse AND to start a new one. I have never seen that before, but to me it reads well.

Now i probably dont quite understand but im getting there, but it seems like something dramatic and drastic and possily bad happened and this person goes in to face it, wants to give up but then overcomes it and takes on life with a new outlook.

really awesome.
keep writing.

adrienne

you are so deep i love it

I love the evolution from the desolate to the upbeat, and the fact that the journey from negative to positive itself evolves with the flowing use of repetition. It seems very thoughtful and carefully constructed. Great work. Thank you.