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Question:do i lie? do i even try? when i said i get high i ment it, bye,bye.
but you want to blow up everything, like a mythbuster man -
"its evil is everywhere avoid it where you can!"
you got ads on tv saying weeds the worst, if you give it a chance it'll end with a hearse.
meanwhile heron and crack are making their mark
"its everywhere now that its in this little park"
i smoke weed for the fun or it, not cause i'll vomit and flop around if i dont shoot some of it.
wake up america, focous on the real threat, the "amerikan nazi's" set us up for the domino effect
this broken government, this democratic dictitorship, this artifical concern about the war and whos winning it.
we can do something, you and i. we can let liberty sing, and let freedom really fly.
let our voices be heard like they were in the past, as one nation, one people, free at last.
so as i close up this little spot, if all you hears was "i smoke pot" . then write something stupid and go on your way.
but if not.....


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: do i lie? do i even try? when i said i get high i ment it, bye,bye.
but you want to blow up everything, like a mythbuster man -
"its evil is everywhere avoid it where you can!"
you got ads on tv saying weeds the worst, if you give it a chance it'll end with a hearse.
meanwhile heron and crack are making their mark
"its everywhere now that its in this little park"
i smoke weed for the fun or it, not cause i'll vomit and flop around if i dont shoot some of it.
wake up america, focous on the real threat, the "amerikan nazi's" set us up for the domino effect
this broken government, this democratic dictitorship, this artifical concern about the war and whos winning it.
we can do something, you and i. we can let liberty sing, and let freedom really fly.
let our voices be heard like they were in the past, as one nation, one people, free at last.
so as i close up this little spot, if all you hears was "i smoke pot" . then write something stupid and go on your way.
but if not.....

"let our voices be heard like they were in the past..."

Excellent!

Is this a poem, or the response to a poem somebody else already critiqued?

Please keep in mind that if it's a real poem (and it's very visceral -- nice!) mispellings OUTSIDE of quotation marks will diminish the power of its voice. Inside of quotation marks, you can say anything you like (except that Nazis has no apostrophe...unless you flip that around and write "nazi's Amerika", since the apostrophe denotes ownership...there's a chilling idea!)