What do u think of the poem i wrote (its a different one)?

Question:who are you to tell me to change?
My life was fine until you came along
it seems that all you want to do is gain control

please go away
go f**k your self

forget I was ever there
you were just a mistake
the one thing I regret the most

I wont change for you or anyone else
I am who I am and im not willing to change
and I have no regrets
so just walk away

your friendship hurts, and I wont take it anymore
I need control
I need my life back

so forget my name, and my address, my phone number if you can
dont call me anymore
I wont answer the phone
I will be too busy living my new life without you

you have become just one of my many mistakes
you dont have that same special place
your just a sad part of my past
that I hope never comes back

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: who are you to tell me to change?
My life was fine until you came along
it seems that all you want to do is gain control

please go away
go f**k your self

forget I was ever there
you were just a mistake
the one thing I regret the most

I wont change for you or anyone else
I am who I am and im not willing to change
and I have no regrets
so just walk away

your friendship hurts, and I wont take it anymore
I need control
I need my life back

so forget my name, and my address, my phone number if you can
dont call me anymore
I wont answer the phone
I will be too busy living my new life without you

you have become just one of my many mistakes
you dont have that same special place
your just a sad part of my past
that I hope never comes back

I think its cool and you don't need to change anything. (Your poem or yourself!) Everyone eventually feels this way at least you can put it into words.

Um, no offense but...
It seemed more like an angry rant than a poem. It didn't flow, didn't have imagery, alliteration, or any poetic things. It was like hate mail seperated line by line and called a poem.
This clearly isn't a poem.
But that doesn't mean you should give up.
Oh & a tip for the future...
"Go **** yourself" REALLY takes away from any poem.
But...I like yourr hate mail! :]
Try to experiment more with senses, not stating things directly and showing how things make you FEEL.
Try to have a pattern to your words, so they flow nicely.
And get a thesaurus to make your work look more intellectual.
It will be respected more that way.