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Position:Home>Poetry> Poem or maybe not... i just had to say it..?Question:feelings were not unsure, just denied. now that i wanted you, can you be more further than ever been? why did i not say it before? why did i push you away? why did i deny you? why did i deny you, you that makes me happy... paths have crossed yet nothing is there.. nothing nothing nothing im just nothing to you now... Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: feelings were not unsure, just denied. now that i wanted you, can you be more further than ever been? why did i not say it before? why did i push you away? why did i deny you? why did i deny you, you that makes me happy... paths have crossed yet nothing is there.. nothing nothing nothing im just nothing to you now... not a poem more a performance piece the repetition is useless... does ... nothing!! too much resides with the persona so the reader is left with an abstract experience, which is difficult to connect to but i understand this isnt the intention.... i know sometimes u just have to get things out and frankly who cares if its a poem at that point... its necessary! I pushed too far to pull you back and lost so much to silence. You, who made me happy, one day, will walk across my path as if nothing was there :) on the second line you could cut that sentence in half and put the othe half beneath it so you can have better flow, i like it, symbalizes regret, right? |