Is my poem good. .?

Question:I've never written one, since I suck at it. D :
Don't mind punctuation and grammer~ > >;

im trying to learn how to trust
but its getting too difficult
dont worry, my love
you know im not one to give up
can you tell me,
what is it they're trying to do?
did you know they're trying to ruin us?
should i believe them?
maybe they're telling me the truth.
it's happened too many times before.
it's hard to determine the lies and the truth
especially since your not here
especially since i cant even talk to you
i need to find out soon
my heart feels like its ripping in two
i feel so betrayed. even though,
nothing has happened yet
but i know nothing good will come out of this
i want to be stronger
but its hard when people try to make me weak
do you think you can help me?
help me to become stronger?
can you prove that you only love me
and no one else?
because if you can,
i can finally give my whole heart to you.
i'll finally be able to trust you. .

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I've never written one, since I suck at it. D :
Don't mind punctuation and grammer~ > >;

im trying to learn how to trust
but its getting too difficult
dont worry, my love
you know im not one to give up
can you tell me,
what is it they're trying to do?
did you know they're trying to ruin us?
should i believe them?
maybe they're telling me the truth.
it's happened too many times before.
it's hard to determine the lies and the truth
especially since your not here
especially since i cant even talk to you
i need to find out soon
my heart feels like its ripping in two
i feel so betrayed. even though,
nothing has happened yet
but i know nothing good will come out of this
i want to be stronger
but its hard when people try to make me weak
do you think you can help me?
help me to become stronger?
can you prove that you only love me
and no one else?
because if you can,
i can finally give my whole heart to you.
i'll finally be able to trust you. .

I know that you said to ignore the punctuation, but you sometimes put it in at the ends of the lines, and other times didn't. I wasn't sure when I was supposed to continue on to the next line, and when to pause. This destroys any chance at rhythm that you may have attempted. However, I see no rhythm anyhow.

It seems as if you attempted to rhyme, and then gave up.

This is an extremely trite and hackneyed poem. I've literally heard all of this crap before. Please, try not to write exactly the words that other poets have used before you. Expand your vocabulary and try again. Also, try to add some rhythm next time.

It's really good. Grats on writing it.

it's perfect

this is the best poem EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I really like the way you wrote this poem. Very poetic.

You should become a poet like Edgar Allan Poe or any famous person you can recall.

I liked it. It was pretty good IMO.

This poem is the definition of cliche subject matter.

it's beautiful... and it's wierd how much i can relate to this...
u know what tho?
it's because we listen to much to the voices of other ppl.
and in a way we let them into our relationships...
altho not on purpose.
so yeah.
but we jus gotta keep our eyes open...
idk...
but i get it.
i do.
trust is truly hard when u've been hurt so many times b4.
this poem touched me.
thank u for writin it.
=)
( i know i didn't make sense)...i tried tho =)

It's not perfect and its not the best poem ever in my opinion. It seems like you use diffent styles within the whole poem. Try to find your own style and stick with it. To keep rythm on key is to have syllables close..... like each line have 7 and 8 somethign like that. Thats mainly how you get rythmn flowing.

I think you should make rhythm in this poem. then after that ur poem should be rather good

Yes, you do have talant now work with it. If you want to that is. You did a great job here. Trust yourself!!!!!!!!! Just read, read read poetry and you'll get the hang of it. Work with your poem.