What Do You Think Of This Poem? (honest)?

Question:She claw, I Bite
She scream, I fight
She run, I walk
She laugh, I talk
We were buddies
We were friends
We were sisters
till the end
To bad it had to happen this way
But i knew it would happen
one day.

or this one

Being lost is like a bad dream
A bad dream is like reality
Reality is like being lost.....in the universe

orr this one?

My stomach is empty
My jeans finally fit me
My friends are concerned
My mom doenst know
My mind is confused
can someone tell me what to do?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: She claw, I Bite
She scream, I fight
She run, I walk
She laugh, I talk
We were buddies
We were friends
We were sisters
till the end
To bad it had to happen this way
But i knew it would happen
one day.

or this one

Being lost is like a bad dream
A bad dream is like reality
Reality is like being lost.....in the universe

orr this one?

My stomach is empty
My jeans finally fit me
My friends are concerned
My mom doenst know
My mind is confused
can someone tell me what to do?

Again, I like the first one the best, lol. I think ur short poems are really good and they simply flows.

ur second one is ok but it doesnt flow very well. Try evening out the sylablles. Like if the first line has ten sylallables, then also make the 2rd line 10 syllables.

the third one is cool too. I like ur choice of words and it really makes the reader think.

I love poetry altho Im not very good at it myself, lol. Good luck, cheers and may ur creative juices keep flowing!

i liked the first one it was really good the second one idk about and if you added more on to the third one i bet you could make it really amazing!
Hope i helped,
Elle S

u sound anorexic..