Something a little different. Will you tell me what you think?

Question:Author's Note: The title is within the poem

Feral is the beast,
Eating at me
Recognizing all
Of my fear.
Crystalline,
Impure eyes.
One move
Under those fangs and I
Sail into eternity

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Author's Note: The title is within the poem

Feral is the beast,
Eating at me
Recognizing all
Of my fear.
Crystalline,
Impure eyes.
One move
Under those fangs and I
Sail into eternity

I am colling the Poem Police... You should be arrested...

Skies, that was more cheesy then Michah on a Swiss factory tour...

But so was that...

What can I say... You are simply FEROCIOUS! RAHR!

I like it. I think it's good. Keep writing.

I'm having difficulties following it. The feral beast within recognizes all your fears but is not your innate fears, which was my first thought but that isn't it. But then it kills you. What inside is killing you?

Perhaps I'm just a little dense here, but I'm not following.

I comment, because I really like the flow, the wording, the rhythm, the poetry.

Ferrous unbeasting
Nonconsuming, otherfeasting
Unrecognizable doubt
Uncrystalline eyes moving
Away from fangs and arrows
Oars stabbing at water

Sail into eternity how..Romantic...? Heh my type of romance..anyways...Sorry I'm a freak but I like what you did with the title..Too bad the ignorant masses just can't grasp the concept...Of course i am one of those ignorant masses but still I like to pretend otherwise

Normally I intensely dislike Acrostic poems. It's because they are so often so very badly written and so bloody obviously constructed to fit the selected word.

Your poem is exactly what I'm talking about when I mention that structure should seem almost accidental. I did not notice it was an acrostic poem. I just liked the image it put forth.

I would consider one change in punctuation. I believe line two is an aside and should be encapsulated with commas:

Feral is the beast,
***Eating at me,
Recognizing all
Of my fear.
Crystalline,
Impure eyes.
One move
Under those fangs and I
Sail into eternity

Well done.

Cool...It's a Ferocious poem ;) I like acrostics that aren't that obvious as well and I think you've done a wonderful job of blending each line and making it flow. Beautiful as always.

roar!

What a poem!
One of the best.
No! Don't you rest
Do it again,
Each line is a test.
Read it across
Fear not the loss.
Utterly cool,
Little Miss Cool.

ferocious?