First poem for monday. How do you like this.?

Question:"desire"

Behind the scenes of destiny,
Desire burns through all my veins.
I adore your plans for me,
Pleasure I get but also pain.

Bathed in sin, my blackened soul,
Take me to our love excess.
The bites you leave, they take their toll,
To only you, I will confess.

Tie me down, for I am yours,
Take me for your perfect lust.
Use me now, our love is pure,
In you my love, nothing but trust.

I adore you can't you see,
All you tease, I belong to you.
In ecstacy your name shall be,
The pain I feel in every hue.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "desire"

Behind the scenes of destiny,
Desire burns through all my veins.
I adore your plans for me,
Pleasure I get but also pain.

Bathed in sin, my blackened soul,
Take me to our love excess.
The bites you leave, they take their toll,
To only you, I will confess.

Tie me down, for I am yours,
Take me for your perfect lust.
Use me now, our love is pure,
In you my love, nothing but trust.

I adore you can't you see,
All you tease, I belong to you.
In ecstacy your name shall be,
The pain I feel in every hue.

mmm i love this...ive jsut read it over 5 times...lol...it flows wonderfully...and i love your wording....

all your poetry is amazing...and it just seems to get better...

this one created a nice image....of something so clsoe but out fo reach right now....:)

Gettin a bit kinky, huh? abab rhyme scheme works good on this one.

outstanding work

Chi-fu!
i like this one...though.....i'm still waiting for my book......see ya later!
~Deadly Poetry

Finally made it, enjoyably.

With respect, and you know I can be, in that regard,
I might drop "ALL"

I might also change LOVE in that line to Loving, although in the context of the piece LOVE might not at all, be at issue.

In ALL your teasing... I belong to you.

In any case it works for me, and I hope you know well by now, I'm not so into "rules"

Good on ya, You took the day and varied it.

Steven Wolf