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so i am a 16 yr old grl and i wanna be a writer well in a way i just i really look to music and poetry for my out let on everything and i wanna kno wut you think of this poem is it good wut do you think and wut should i title it!?!?!? thanxz



I know things always happen for a reason,
But sometimes I just don’t understand
Does anyone really understand!?
At times I find myself
On my knees in tears
Praying to you,
I wonder if you can hear me
I know you can
I wish oh I wish
You could give me a sign
A sign that things are going to be alright
I know you’re the reason I’m here
Singing for you tonight
I know you’re the reason I keep writing
You live on through me
I know this
this is true…
I try to deny what I know is true
I blamed you for so long
And I know I shouldn’t have
I know that you were not to blame
Nor was the dear lord
At times I find myself wanting to break down and cry
And yet I stay strong just like that day
I felt you there
I felt you standing beside me
Telling me your were okie
Telling me everything was going to be alright
I know that you’re here each and everyday
Not missing a day of my life
Helping me through
Pushing me on
At times I scream out
Your to blame
I hate you for leaving me the way you did
You didn’t say goodbye
I didn’t get to kiss you on the hand
I didn’t get that last good night
I didn’t get that last goodbye
And yet I knew right when it happen
I woke up
In tears
I knew you were gone
I knew you had gone to the dear lord
And my soul cried out
Yet not shedding a tear…



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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it is a wonderfully emotive poem!.

It is yours to name, but I might suggest
Wondering and Wandering among the Stars!.
(or among the Heavens)

But that said, since you want to be a writer, I am going to offer some encouragement and free advice from a sympathetic fellow writer!. I will also play the role of your editor by pointing out some errors I caught, but make sure you read the positive things I wrote at the end!. I started out simply making note of the errors, but quickly realized it would make this answer too unwieldy!. I am going to list the letters you used together in place of actual words and then the words you should have used, then use brackets [!.!.!.] to indicate other errors and how to correct them!. I am doing this for free!. One of the things I do in real life is editing!. But keep this in mind, if this were to have come across my desk, as soon as I saw “Wut” I would either have thrown it in the trash or immediately sent it back to you!. I would not have made it to the first actual word you used!.

Wut is not a word!. Use "What" if you want to be taken seriously and do not want to sound stupid or linguistically sloppy and lazy!. also:

i should be I
grl should be girl
wanna should be want to unless you are quoting someone’s actual words!.
kno is know
thanxz is thanks
okie should be OK
your and you’re do not mean the same thing

Your question should read "I wrote this!. What do you think of it!?

Use appropriate punctuation or none at all!. Your poem should be uniform!. Use none or always use it when indicated!. Most of my suggestions on punctuation are more than just suggestions, but for some few you could use either a period or a comma!.

Wut do you think of this i wrote
[so i - "So, I" but even better, drop the “So,” leaving it “I”] am a 16 yr old grl and i wanna be a [writer - writer!. (Use a period!.)] [well in a way i just i really look to - “I look to” or “I really look to”] music and poetry for my [out let - outlet] [on - for would be better] [everything and i wanna - everything!. I would like to] kno wut you think of this [poem is it good wut - poem!. Is it good!? What] do you think and [wut should i title it!?!?!? thanxz - what title should I give it!? Thanks (or better, “Thank you!.”)]



I know things always happen for a reason,
But sometimes I just don’t understand[!.]
Does anyone really understand!?
At times I find myself
On my knees in tears
Praying to you[, - !.]
I wonder if you can hear me[!?]
I know you can[!. or !]
I [wish oh I wish - wish, Oh, I wish]
You could give me a sign [!.]
A sign that things are going to be alright[!.]
I know you’re the reason I’m here
Singing for you tonight[!.]
I know you’re the reason I keep writing[!.]
You live on through me[,]
I know this[,]
this is true…
I try to deny what I know is true[!.]
I blamed you for so long[,]
And I know I shouldn’t have ([Wonderful! You did not use “I shouldn’t of !.!.!.”])
I know that you were not to blame[,]
Nor was the dear [lord - Lord!.]
At times I find myself wanting to break down and cry[,]
And yet I stay strong just like that day
I felt you there[!. (Again, Wonderful! You did not use “their !.!.!.”
I felt you standing beside me
Telling me your were [okie - OK,]
Telling me everything was going to be alright[!.]
I know that you’re here each and everyday[, or !.]
Not missing a day of my life[ditto]
Helping me through[ditto]
Pushing me on[!.]
At times I scream out[,]
[Your to blame - “You’re to blame ( Bravo!. You did not use 2, two or too!.)]
I hate you for leaving me the way you did[!.]
You didn’t say goodbye[!.]
I didn’t get to kiss you on the hand[!.]
I didn’t get that last good night[!.]
I didn’t get that last goodbye[, or !.]
And yet I knew right when it [happen - happened!.]
I woke up[, or nothing as you have done!.]
In tears[!.]
I knew you were gone[!.]
I knew you had gone to the dear [lord - Lord!.]
And my soul cried out
Yet not shedding a tear…


Beautiful, just beautiful!. If I were in a position to do so, I would send it back to you, red pencil marks and all, and ask you to change it, resubmit it and I would then find a place and a way to get it published!. I may in the future be where I can!. I will keep you in mind!.


Edit: I meant to suggest you make it an ellipse only at the end instead of an ellipse followed by a period!. Adding the period may not even be noticed by many, but I feel you meant it to be an ellipse (three dots) only!. I approve of that if that is what you meant!. It makes more sense that way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was really, really good!. "Tears not fallen" should be the name!. If this poem was inspired by Someone You lost, I am sorry!. I can't believe you are only sixteen!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's beautiful!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Bloody friggin hell, that's great!. Hmmm, call it The last goodbye!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is really deep, and right about now I can completely relate!.
Would titling it with the person's name be too much!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Can You hear Me!.!.!.!.!.
Sorry for your pain, honey, HUGS!! Nice heart felt poem!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think its really good, good luck =)Www@QuestionHome@Com