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What is wrong with this sentence and what can I include to make it sound better!? This is about ancient Mayan Art!.

Human sacrifice was extremely important in the society, so much so that there was a ‘Platform of Skulls’ which displayed the heads of victims of sacrifice!.

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The importance of human sacrifice in Mayan society is apparent in the archaeological record!. Following ritual decapitations, the heads of sacrificial victims were displayed publicly on a "Platform of Skulls"!. (site a source here) Www@QuestionHome@Com

change it to:
Human sacrifice was extremely important in the society, so much that there was a 'Platform of Skulls' which displayed the sacrificed victims heads!.
deleting the "so" after "much"!. changing it to sacrificed victims heads sounds smoother!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Human sacrifice was an important part of the Mayan society,as evidence by the "Platform of Skulls" which depicted the heads of victims killed during religious ceremonial gatherings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like 'william p's' answer except I think th end should go: "!.!.!.the adorning "Platform of Skulls" which depicted the acceptance and importance of victims killed during their religious ceremonial gatherings!."
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Human sacrifice played such a pivotal role in the Mayan society that there was a "Platform of Skulls" which displayed the heads of sacrificial victims!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Human sacrifice was extremely important to this society!. So much so that there was a 'Platform of Skulls' which displayed the heads of the victims they sacrificed!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Human sacrifice was so important to Mayan culture they displayed a "Platform of Skulls" from the heads of their victims!.Www@QuestionHome@Com