Help on this dance.. i need opinions and additions!?

Question: Help on this dance!.!. i need opinions and additions!!?

okay sooo im making up a dance to bye bye by mariah carey!.!. so far it goes like this!.

pencil turn (arms: left up, right down)
releve in second
fan kick with left leg
same pencil turn but twisting your arms to front of chest
down into split
turn on butt then stand
four starch pirouette turn, jump into grande jete

does it sound good so far!?
if you have any tips or additions cause i need to get through the whole song it would be much appreciated!.
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(It's actually "Forced arch" not "Four starch" just so you know =)
Sounds cool, maybe do something else on the ground!. I like doing a jazz penche then "breaking" your knees to fall over!. Hard to explain, but maybe I can inspire you!? You can try pas de bourree turns and coupe turns!.!.!.those tend to be good fillers before a jump in my opinion!. Keep playing around!. When I choreograph, sometimes I like to turn on a few other songs and just free dance to see if something comes that I can use!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com