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Question:I just got back from dance. I had pointe I actally like going on pointe(for any non- dancers pointe is when you wear hard shoes with a peice of wood in it and you go on to the tops of your toes) it hurts but it makes you feel taller stronger and powerful.

I love going to dance.... it's like your in a bubble where all that matters is that your going to dance and talk and work on somthing that you really love to do, somthing that never let's you down the way that people might. It's always the same, but in a good way. You go to the same room with the same floor and the same lights and the same people, and you find out what's happening in there lives outside of dance.

It doesn't matter if there is somthing wrong in your life you get to forget about it, for just an hour or two, and throw your self into dance.

It's nice when it rains or it's dark. It makes you feel safe, like nothing can hurt you. Even though anything could hurt you, if you made one wrong move you could break or twist somthing. And then in a blink of an eye eveything you were working on will all go away. And you'll have to work ten times harder and longer to get back to where you were.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I just got back from dance. I had pointe I actally like going on pointe(for any non- dancers pointe is when you wear hard shoes with a peice of wood in it and you go on to the tops of your toes) it hurts but it makes you feel taller stronger and powerful.

I love going to dance.... it's like your in a bubble where all that matters is that your going to dance and talk and work on somthing that you really love to do, somthing that never let's you down the way that people might. It's always the same, but in a good way. You go to the same room with the same floor and the same lights and the same people, and you find out what's happening in there lives outside of dance.

It doesn't matter if there is somthing wrong in your life you get to forget about it, for just an hour or two, and throw your self into dance.

It's nice when it rains or it's dark. It makes you feel safe, like nothing can hurt you. Even though anything could hurt you, if you made one wrong move you could break or twist somthing. And then in a blink of an eye eveything you were working on will all go away. And you'll have to work ten times harder and longer to get back to where you were.

more discritoin like simels and medifors to esablish setting so you can esily establish mood to put your reader in the story. more discriptive words. and im 13 too but im a pretty good Wrighter. I cant spell though

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