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Position:Home>Dancing> This is my personal statement for applying to college/work do you think its a loQuestion: This is my personal statement for applying to college/work do you think its a load of rubbish or good?ALTHOUGH I HAVENT FINISHED IT YET I WOULD LIKE OTHERS OPINIONS AND ADVICE: Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I'm not sure what the standards are where you are from, but generally I was taught to spell everything out (i.e. GCSE) the first time with the initials afterwards, then you can use the initials the next time it is referred to. Under aims and ambitions you have one item. "Aims" and "Ambitions" are plural... either add another item or just say "My Ambition". Do they have access to your estimated GCSE? If not, I wouldn't mention that they aren't so great. Especially if you plan to retake them. "Hobbies and interests: These are a few of my hobbies and interests" - this is redundant. You've got a good start from what I can see. |