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Do you guys think my poem is deep?

This poem is about my good close friend moved yesterday...=/ im really sad so i wrote this i need your honest opinion and do you think this poem is deep?

You told me your moving miles away
Left me speechless with nothing to say
Didn??t want to get hurt, so I tried to drift away
I was scared. It was like I was trapped in the dark.
You began to notice & you asked why I've been ignoring you.
I knew I was, but I denied your question & responded "I'm not."
I tried to act so cold like I didn't even care,
And made it as if she was a stranger; someone I had never seen or met before.
But the pain grows stronger each day like being shot over and over.

Time passes by, and it seems like we're not talking.
But I thought about all the times we've had.
And I thought about the way we used to talk, we shared so many deep thoughts,
And laughs, and now we're sharing tears.
I can't ask what happened
Knowing it was my fault
For distancing myself when we should have been closer

Additional Details

2 weeks ago
So I wrote her a goodbye letter,
Gave it to you with tears in my eyes.
Trying so hard to pretend I'm okay...
Tomorrow is your last day, and my mind was fulled with goodbyes
I couldn??t sleep, my heart was racing as if I were being chasing by a train

Last time I??m gonna see you,
I told myself not to cry when I say my goodbyes
My heart pounding as the bell rang I couldn't take it
I broke down & started crying, and my tears were like an ocean.
You tried cheering me up, but you couldn't,
Because we both knew nothing would help

You left me behind, I was blaming myself for everything
I still don't wanna cry, and yet you turn back for one last look.
I regret everything I've done, and I'm still crying.
Tears' waterfall won't stop falling
In school time, in day time, in night time, for all time
But somehow I found myself thinking...
One day I'll see my friend again.
And happiness will come back, someday...


what do you guys think?


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 2 weeks ago
So I wrote her a goodbye letter,
Gave it to you with tears in my eyes.
Trying so hard to pretend I'm okay...
Tomorrow is your last day, and my mind was fulled with goodbyes
I couldn??t sleep, my heart was racing as if I were being chasing by a train

Last time I??m gonna see you,
I told myself not to cry when I say my goodbyes
My heart pounding as the bell rang I couldn't take it
I broke down & started crying, and my tears were like an ocean.
You tried cheering me up, but you couldn't,
Because we both knew nothing would help

You left me behind, I was blaming myself for everything
I still don't wanna cry, and yet you turn back for one last look.
I regret everything I've done, and I'm still crying.
Tears' waterfall won't stop falling
In school time, in day time, in night time, for all time
But somehow I found myself thinking...
One day I'll see my friend again.
And happiness will come back, someday...


what do you guys think?