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Can you give your opinion on my story and help me with it too?

Right this is not the story, since I won't disclose the fact to anyone. This is simply a framework that I have built my story on. I will be careful not to say anything that will explain the situation within the story or to hint at the ending.

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1 week ago
"This is a story of a tribe that lives close to a tyrannical empire which terrorises their land. They are originally nomadic people that have now occupied villages. They are ruled by a clerical class (the elders) that is strictly chosen from one family of the tribe. A young adult is one day "inspired" to unite these people against the tyrannical empire, but being so young, he is rejected. However, he is able to convince the old chieftain of the ruling class to his side. The elders are furious but their opposition falls short of action out of respect for the old chieftain. The young guy manages to find followers who are prepared to resist the empire (which forcefully takes tribute). Then the chieftain dies (or is poisoned?)

1 week ago
...and he and his followers are forced to leave their homeland. They have a hard time surviving, but the young guy establishes the foundation of a new Order. Later months, his scouts inform him of an attack on his homeland by the enemy.
The empire's army defeats the elders and decides to occupy the town.
The young guy orders his followers (trained as soldiers) to attack them in the dark of the night and take the enemy by surprise. This results in their victory and causes the population to embrace them, much to the elder's dismay.."
The story continues with the empire's revenge and so on, and so forth, but this was just the first 1/3 of the story's framework. What is your opinion. Is it a good idea. How can I improve? And so on.
I have refrained from mentioning any names in case I change.
Thanks

1 week ago
Note, any romance, or light parts, or comedy or mystery/suspense will be added on. This is just the framework


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 1 week ago
"This is a story of a tribe that lives close to a tyrannical empire which terrorises their land. They are originally nomadic people that have now occupied villages. They are ruled by a clerical class (the elders) that is strictly chosen from one family of the tribe. A young adult is one day "inspired" to unite these people against the tyrannical empire, but being so young, he is rejected. However, he is able to convince the old chieftain of the ruling class to his side. The elders are furious but their opposition falls short of action out of respect for the old chieftain. The young guy manages to find followers who are prepared to resist the empire (which forcefully takes tribute). Then the chieftain dies (or is poisoned?)