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One more...?

Grandma said
Look up at the horizon
Grandma said
Be kind to everyone
Grandma said
Say your prayers to Jesus
Grandma said
Look both ways and hold my hand

Mother said
Help me gather eggs for breakfast
Mother said
Wash your hands and wash your face
Mother said
Put a quarter in the plate
Mother said
Hold you money in your hand

Sister said
Watch out for Bobby Johnson
Sister said
Help me do arithmetic
Sister said
I will pray that you come home
Sister said
Let God take you by the hand

Wife said
You??re a father to our children
Wife said
Help me do the pots and pans
Wife said
I will love you??forever
Wife said
When we must go, take my hand

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Nice. I like the structure a lot. Each stanza a different person, showing different perspectives, but each ending with a line about the hand. The last line works great to tie it all up.

Personally, I really appeciate the meter of a poem; so I wish this one had a more regular meter. Even when the meter is very complex, I think it's cool when there's some kind of repeating pattern. It demonstrates a real command of the language when it all fit right but it's still deep and doesn't sound corny.

Still, a great piece.

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