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Tell me the truth on it.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: okay, first of all, that's not a poem.
it's a list on sentences. some are questions & some are sentences. it has potential of being a question poem like langston hughes poem, "a dream deffered". you defintely need to work on the soacing so you have more emotion and there's more buildup and momentum in the poem, otherwise, it's not differeent from reading an essay. like langston hughes's poem, make each question a new line. remember, the whole poem must be questions.
the end is defintely strong. it supplies a very strong dose of the emotion that you want to give to readers. i love '?!?!?' in the last line. except the last three lines, make the rest questions. that is what a question poem is about. your poem right now seems very boring, redundant, and disorganized. it seems like you're just rambling on. you can't really get your point across. so try to make it a question poems. each line is a question. and then the three lines in the end, keep the same.