Could I get some feedback on a new poem?

Question:

Could I get some feedback on a new poem?

Unclarity

Trudging through the door,
shoulders slumping low,
our hero sits and waits.
Glasses left behind,
colors splay in an
impressionist dance,
casting forgiving
auras over the
ugly and the drunk,
splashing candlelight
kaleidoscopes, as
his half-blindness holds
steady till he can
slip at last into
a martini more
comfortable.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The first two lines imply meter, although this is not a metrical poem. Also, the alliteration between the first two words in each of the first two lines also implies a pattern that is not repeated anywhere else... you might want to revise the first two lines a little bit. Other than that I liked it... there's excellent imagery and you are left wondering who the protagonist is, and why he is there... plenty of mystery!

Thanks!