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Feedback on a poem?

Cold
Windy
Air
Blowing through my hair
Never
Knowing
Why
My boyfriend chose to die
We
Loved
Eachother
More than our mother??s
I
Wish
He
Had not gone to that party
He
Wouldn??t
Drink
He would stop and sit and think
He
Jumped
On
And they drove off the lawn
Who
Would
Know
He wasn??t drunk the driver was though
He
Said
??Please
Give me the wheel!??
Then the driver sneezed
He fell upon his knees??

??He
Is
Dead??
The sad policeman said
??Sorry
To
You
There??s not much we can do
So
Be
Okay
We??re leaving your house today??
I Got
A
Call
From his brother, Paul
??Brad
Died
Today??
He said in a gray way
I
Cried
Hard
And crawled out to the yard
I
Took
Rope
And swung it to a lope
Around
My
Neck
My life was now a wreck
My
Mother
Saw
She just watched in awe
As
I
Hung
I was way to young
She
Cut
Rope
Down I fell to mope
Now
I??m
Here
In this hospital that??s austere
Time
Is
Up
I grab my cup
Time
For
Therapy
In a group of Three
Will
You
Join?
It doesn??t cost a coin
That??s
No?
Oh
Well
Now back to my cell
That??s
Too
Bad

2 days ago
Because I love you,

Brad

2 days ago
No this didn't really happen. I just know someone it happened to.