Can I get poem help from those fantastic poets out there?

Question:

Can I get poem help from those fantastic poets out there?

Okay, here it is. Any HELPFUL critism is sooo much appreciated. Please. Thanks oodles.

In the nighttime the world is
A black and white photograph
Everything still and lovely

Alone, ducking under weeping willows
Their tears brush my shoulders
You are only a shout away, it seems
Only a shout away

Alone, walking beside a moonlit lake
Pale silver painted waves
You are only a shout away, it seems
Only a shout away

Alone, passing that old bench we sat on
Just a lifetime ago
You are only a shout away, it seems
Only a shout away

I shout
The silence and tranquility
shatters
You are gone and here I am
alone

In the nighttime the world is
a black and white photograph
Everything still and lovely

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i think this is a beautiful piece, very good. very expressive an i feel i am almost there w/ you. the only rough part for me is:'In the nighttime the world is
a black and white photograph'
it isn't as smooth as the rest of it. my suggestion is to mayb switch it around, like this:
'a black and white photograph
Is the nighttime the world'
i don't kno hope that helps~