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Position:Home>Arts & Humanities> What do you think of my poem???Question: What do you think of my poem???I don??t wanna??????????love you anymore Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: at first I was like "wanna"--I'm going to hate this. I didn't. It reads very well. Your strongest image and line in my opinion: "I don??t wanna feel like I??m melting when you talk to me" I really liked that. Yes, you could tighten it up, but it's those type of lines that make it worth writing the whole thing. I also liked your ending. I would like to suggest something...though feel free to ignore it if you like, just a suggestion: When you get to your last four lines, you may want to consider replacing "wanna" with "want to". I think what this would show is a building of tension and determination on the part of the narrator. I don??t want to love you anymore I don??t want to care about you anymore I don??t want to want you anymore Because you not knowing I love you is breaking my heart It just feels like it would be stronger--but if you don't agree go with your instincts. Just my thoughts. |