Help where can i take this story and what about spelling and grammar?

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Help where can i take this story and what about spelling and grammar?

Vince??s Viewpoint
I am standing in the living room, looking at the fireplace in the middle above the glowing embers of the once roaring fire sits a photograph in a silver heart-shaped frame. I approach the fireplace with slightly cautious footsteps I pick the picture up as though it is fragile. I look at the picture again; I look deep into the eyes of my sweet innocent angel. I have to blink the tears back. I replace the picture on the fireplace and go to the large mahogany cabinet by the kitchen door. I open the doors, remove a photograph album, and sit on the couch. I have to wipe away the now cascading tears. In the pictures before my eyes, we look so happy. I'm not crying because we broke up or she died I'm crying because she has suffered so much. Paul Heyman, the cause of all of the suffering made me want to retch with rage.I have never seen someone so rational change as Linda did that night One minute she was my calm CEO and the next she was a clingy sobbing wreck!

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2 days ago
legitimate answers only please

2 days ago
this is a sample of a fan fiction i am working on the characters are all WWE employees and not my own therefore i do not own any of them the ideas are my own

2 days ago
this is for a later chapter

2 days ago
i have written a little more...
I have never seen someone so rational change as Linda did that night. One minute she was my calm CEO and the next she was a clingy sobbing wreck all because Heyman raped and humiliated her two years ago almost to the day.
I knew I had to help her but how? How could I help her? Should never have allowed this to happen in the first place I know that and I am guilt-ridden. Sitting somberly in the dim light of what remained of the fire I look at photographs of when our children were small, Linda looks so serene and happy.
Linda??s Viewpoint
I wake up alone in bed, Stone Cold is dozing in the chair at our bedside. I creep out of our room and down the stairs into the living room to find Vince fast asleep on the couch, he has a photo album sitting on his knee...

2 days ago
some other things you should know before answering...
1 I am from scotland
2 the story is written in the first person narrative because that is how i write
3 i know what is going to happen much later but I am finding it difficult to put my thoughts in to words on a page because i am dyscalculaic

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 2 days ago
legitimate answers only please